"The Elements of Style" |
V. WORDS AND EXPRESSIONS COMMONLY MISUSED
My opinion is as good or better than his. | My opinion is as good as his, or better (if not better). |
In many cases, the rooms were poorly ventilated. | Many of the rooms were poorly ventilated. |
It has rarely been the case that any mistake has been made. | Few mistakes have been made. |
See Wood, Suggestions to Authors, pp. 68-71, and Quiller-Couch, The Art of Writing, pp. 103-106.
Acts of a hostile character | Hostile acts |
As noun, often loosely used in perfunctory writing about fashions, music, painting, and other arts: "an Oriental effect;" "effects in pale green;" "very delicate effects;" "broad effects;" "subtle effects;" "a charming effect was produced by." The writer who has a definite meaning to express will not take refuge in such vagueness.
At the end of a list introduced by such as, for example, or any similar expression, etc. is incorrect.
On the formula the fact that, see under Rule 13.
His superior training was the great factor in his winning the match. | He won the match by being better trained. |
Heavy artillery is becoming an increasingly important factor in deciding battles. | Heavy artillery is playing a larger and larger part in deciding battles. |
A feature of the entertainment especially worthy of mention was the singing of Miss A. | (Better use the same number of words to tell what Miss A. sang, or if the programme has already been given, to tell something of how she sang.) |
As a verb, in the advertising sense of offer as a special attraction, to be avoided.
He is a man who is very ambitious. | He is very ambitious. |
Spain is a country which I have always wanted to visit. | I have always wanted to visit Spain. |
The roads were almost impassable. However, we at last succeeded in reaching camp. | The roads were almost impassable. At last, however, we succeeded in reaching camp. |
When however comes first, it means in whatever way or to whatever extent.
However you advise him, he will probably do as he thinks best. |
However discouraging the prospect, he never lost heart. |
He had less men than in the previous campaign. | He had fewer men than in the previous campaign. |
Less refers to quantity, fewer to number. "His troubles are less than mine" means "His troubles are not so great as mine." "His troubles are fewer than mine" means "His troubles are not so numerous as mine." It is, however, correct to say, "The signers of the petition were less than a hundred, "where the round number, a hundred, is something like a collective noun, and less is thought of as meaning a less quantity or amount.
Mr. B. also spoke along the same lines. | Mr. B. also spoke, to the same effect. |
He is studying along the line of French literature. | He is studying French literature. |
A literal flood of abuse | A flood of abuse |
Literally dead with fatigue | Almost dead with fatigue (dead tired) |
Most everybody | Almost everybody |
Most all the time | Almost all the time |
Acts of a hostile nature | Hostile acts |
Often vaguely used in such expressions as "a lover of nature;" "poems about nature." Unless more specific statements follow, the reader cannot tell whether the poems have to do with natural scenery, rural life, the sunset, the untracked wilderness, or the habits of squirrels.
Not to be used as an adjective; use neighboring.
The word people is not to be used with words of number, in place of persons. If of "six people" five went away, how many "people" would be left?
Another phase of the subject | Another point (another question) |
He possessed great courage. | He had great courage (was very brave). |
He was the fortunate possessor of | He owned |
Works of fiction are listed under the names of their respective authors. | Works of fiction are listed under the names of their authors. |
The one mile and two mile runs were won by Jones and Cummings respectively. | The one mile and two mile runs were won by Jones and by Cummings. |
In some kinds of formal writing, as in geometrical proofs, it may be necessary to use respectively, but it should not appear in writing on ordinary subjects.
On the use of so to introduce clauses, see Rule 4.
A member of the student body | A student |
Popular with the student body | Liked by the students |
The student body passed resolutions. | The students passed resolutions. |
Dayton has adopted the commission system of government. | Dayton has adopted government by commission. |
The dormitory system | Dormitories |
Use he with all the above words, unless the antecedent is or must be feminine.
The office and salesrooms are on the ground floor, while the rest of the building is devoted to manufacturing. | The office and salesrooms are on the ground floor; the rest of the building is devoted to manufacturing. |
Its use as a virtual equivalent of although is allowable in sentences where this leads to no ambiguity or absurdity.
While I admire his energy, I wish it were employed in a better cause. |
This is entirely correct, as shown by the paraphrase,
I admire his energy; at the same time I wish it were employed in a better cause. |
Compare:
While the temperature reaches 90 or 95 degrees in the daytime, the nights are often chilly. | Although the temperature reaches 90 or 95 degrees in the daytime, the nights are often chilly. |
The paraphrase,
The temperature reaches 90 or 95 degrees in the daytime; at the same time the nights are often chilly, |
shows why the use of while is incorrect.
In general, the writer will do well to use while only with strict literalness, in the sense of during the time that.
His brother, whom he said would send him the money | His brother, who he said would send him the money |
The man whom he thought was his friend | The man who (that) he thought was his friend (whom he thought his friend) |
His books are not worth while. | His books are not worth reading (not worth one's while to read; do not repay reading). |
The use of worth while before a noun ("a worth while story") is indefensible.
I should not have succeeded without his help. |
The equivalent of shall in indirect quotation after a verb in the past tense is should, not would.
He predicted that before long we should have a great surprise. |
To express habitual or repeated action, the past tense, without would, is usually sufficient, and from its brevity, more emphatic.
Once a year he would visit the old mansion. | Once a year he visited the old mansion. |